For Immediate Release

April 29, 2009

Contact: Dominic Donovan 202-867-5309

Congressman Schuler Fights for Responsible Business Practices

Washington, D.C.- United States Representative Joseph “Heath” Schuler (D-NC) has proposed an amendment to H.R. 1594- The Income Equity Act of 2009. Spurred by the malpractice of AIG and its executives, this amendment secures appropriate oversight for recipients of Troubled Asset Relief Funding (TARP).

The TARP program was established by the United States Government to strengthen the financial sector by the purchasing of assets from failing financial institutions.

This amendment is the result of a bi-partisan initiative led by Rep. Schuler and Rep. Culberson (R-TX). The amendment will remove the executive compensation deduction for businesses that have either applied or received TARP funding. Insuring the American taxpayers that their money will be put towards real economic development.

Rep. Schuler stated yesterday in a CNN interview that, “We must temper the greed of Wall Street, but not the ambition of Main Street.” Congressman Schuler went on to say that, “This amendment will allow healthy businesses to continue to invest in new markets and create additional jobs.”

In its original form H.R. 1594 would limit the ability of small businesses to attract talent and explore new markets.

“It is up to us as representatives to make sure that we protect the American people,” Schuler continued. “But we must not inhibit the ingenuity that has made us the golden standard we are today.”

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* Do you want them to refer to you as "Joseph 'Heath' Shuler" or just "Heath Shuler"? Just go with the latter. In a bio or something, obviously, it is important to let people know his name is Joseph. Not so much in the release.
* Something that says he is a member of the committee would help. I think the committee is called the House Special Committee on Income Equity and Fairness" or something like that.
* I'm not sure that first paragraph provides a good, concise explanation of what Shuler did or what the amendment does. Including AIG in that mix in the first paragraph may muddle more than clarify, though you can certainly work AIG in later (possibly into a quote).
* Four paragraphs until a quote. I think that's too long to wait.
* The quotes are nice and punchy. "Gold standard" rather than "golden standard," but I do like the quotes a lot and I think journalists would use them.

April 30, 2009

IMMEDIATE RELEASE

CONTACT:
Ellen Beltramo
3800 Victory Parkway
Cincinnati, OH 45207
beltramoe@xavier.edu

Kucinich Holds Forum in Ohio-10 to Defend Importance of H.R 1594

Cleveland, OH- Today, Congressman Kucinich (D-OH) held a town hall meeting today near the West Side Market to discuss the significance of the bill in committee regarding executive compensation. The bill seeks to amend the Internal Revenue Code of 1986 to limit the tax deductibility of executive compensation.

Three amendments to the bill were just passed yesterday in the committee mark-up; one amendment limiting the scope of the bill to only companies who receive federal funding, and two others giving exemptions to the new code if the companies retain 90% of manufacturing in the United States and another if companies provide comprehensive health care to all full time employees. Mr. Kucinich was a part of the debate on these amendments and is in strong support of this bill.

At the town meeting when addressing a question regarding the substance of the bill and its seeming overreaching by the government, Kucinich declared, “It is time that companies are held responsible for how they invest their money and money granted by the government. This bill does not interfere in the market as some of my Republican counterparts would lead you to believe, but rather seeks to close a gaping loophole in the tax code that allows companies to pay their executives enormous bonuses before tax day to avoid paying taxes. It is time these practices are stopped.’

The forum discussing H.R.1594, or the Income Equity Act of 2009, lasted two hours and rallied support for the bill in Cleveland. The vote for passage of the bill is scheduled for Friday May 1st.

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* Really great idea for a release. The lead is nearly perfect, though I would replace "the bill in committee dealing with executive compensation" with "the income equity act." You should also work in that Kucinich is a member of the congressional committee reviewing the legislation somewhere.
* Tax breaks, not deductions.
* Why not make Kucinich's actions the center of the graph on amendments. During a committee markup on Wednesday, Kucinich voted in support of successful amendments that do X and Y. Followed by Kucinich quote.
* How many people showed up to the town meeting?

For Immediate Release: Contact:
April 30, 2009 Arthur Jameson III
Washington, DC Office
(202)452.7468


Adrian Gonzalez
District Office
(773) 509.5027

U.S. Rep. Bobby Rush Announces Support for H.R. 1594

Washington DC — Today Congressman Bobby L. Rush (IL-01) has announced his immediate support of H.R. 1594, a bill that will limit the compensation given to executives who receive large sums of money while their businesses fail in an effort to keep avoid paying certain business taxes. The bill is intended to amend the Internal Revenue code of 1986.

“Responsibility needs to be taken by executives for failing business that are not in the form of a bigger check” commented Rush at a press conference held in his Washington office. “The people of our country are fed up with executives walking around with an extra million in their pocket while they are jobless, penniless and homeless.”

Congressman Rush also supported the efforts of the Democrats to attempt to reward businesses that were working to provide for the American people. He voted in favor of a bill that rewarded companies for not outsourcing and staying in the country, reward those companies that have kept healthcare coverage for their employees and voted for a bill that regulated all federal money that is spent on business.

“If we can encourage companies to reinvest into the people of this nation once again, by providing health care, and by keeping jobs in America then I believe we can truly bring back the American Dream that has fallen by the wayside.”

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* The bill number is meaningless to most Americans and doesn't do you any good in the headline, particularly!
* Get rid of "has" and "immediate" in the first sentence. They are not needed.
* Quote needs reworking. First part of it is unclear. Second part of it suggests that the executives are penniless and homeless.
* Write more actively: "Rush supported the efforts of the Democrats to attempt to reward" is really passive and clunky (supported efforts to attempt to). Instead, try "Rush supported Democratic efforts to reward..."
* In a release, I would drop any pronouns like "He" that refer to the congressman and use his name (Rush). Why? Name recognition. Better to sacrifice a little smoothness in the writing for repetition. If the release reads like "Rush, Rush, Rush, Rush, Rush" that's not entirely a bad thing (though it can be overdone, I suppose).

April 1, 2009
Dear Mr. Ocho-Cinco,

Thank you very much for sharing your views regarding the AIG bonuses granted earlier this year. I appreciate having the benefit of your feedback on this matter.

I am also outraged by the irresponsible actions of Wall Street in the recent months.
As a member of a domestic policy subcommittee, I am at present working very hard to try to increase the regulation of the bailout money. At present, oversight of the bailout money was not granted in the bill appropriating over $120 billion to Wall Street bankers. I am introducing legislation that would require a trace on all taxpayer money spent by the banks. I hope to increase the transparency for the American people between these companies and the federal government with documentation of how and where government money is spent by these companies.

In addition, I am seeking information regarding the recent buy out of National City, a company native to us in Cleveland, by PNC. I feel that the irresponsibility of this purchase has deeply affected the people of Northern Ohio, but also will have resounding effects on all Americans in the near future. A failure to lend funds to the American people will serve only to exacerbate this economic crisis.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.

Sincerely,

Dennis Kucinich
Representative of Ohio- District 10

* I'd drop the also in the second paragraph. I think you are trying to make "also" convey that you share their feelings, but it doesn't come across clearly. "Like you, I am outraged..." or "Like most Americans, I am outraged..." works better.

* "I am at present working very hard to try..." is obviously wordy, but it also comes across kinda wishy-washy. All those caveats (at present, trying...) make it seem like you are not confident you will accomplish anything. Also, something specific works better than something vague. The good news, of course, is that you do talk about something specific -- the introduction of legislation. I didn't see that at first, because it was obscured by the vague language. Put the actions up front in the paragraph, immediately after the outrage.

* Overall, good job hitting the key objectives -- demonstrating simpatico with the constituents (i.e., you share their views) and portraying your member of congress as active.

* Nice job keeping it local by talking about PNC purchase, but you should review your language there. It's a bit unclear.

Kucinich Press Release

April 3, 2009

IMMEDIATE RELEASE

CONTACT:
Ellen Beltramo
3800 Victory Parkway
Cincinnati, OH 45207
beltramoe@xavier.edu

House Passes Resolution Celebrates 10th Anniversary of Colorectal Cancer Month

This Tuesday Congress passed a Concurrent Resolution to acknowledge March as Colorectal Cancer Month. Representative Kucinich supported the resolution because it offers an opportunity to explain the seriousness of the disease and recognizes the importance of those organizations that work to fight colorectal cancer. The resolution was passed with a large majority.

In a press conference today, Congressman Kucinich spoke about the importance of a national program to support awareness of Colorectal Cancer. Speaking at an AMA conference, Kucinich remarked, “Every 10 minutes, someone dies from colorectal cancer because only 39 percent of patients have the cancer diagnosed at an early stage. We must seek to change this reality by increasing awareness about the importance of regular screenings to improve colorectal health.”

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* Diction is off a bit in the headline (celebrating?). Also, shouldn't your member be prominent in the headline?
* Similarly, I think Kucinich's actions should be the lead. If he held a press conference, that makes it easier and it allows him to take a more substantive position on an issue that seems mostly symbolic. My first take: "At a Capitol Hill press conference today, Rep. Dennis Kucinich called on the federal government to increase funding for colorectal cancer research. Kucinich, who supported a House resolution to declare March "colorectal cancer awareness month," said that public awareness campaigns are important, but that "federal research dollars" are key to finding a cure for this potentially fatal disease." Or something like that.
* The resolution passed by voice, which is a small distinction, but more accurate.
* Two paragraphs is a bit terse for a press release. Three to four is more standard.
* I like the use of stats to add credibility. I'm a bit wary of putting them in the quote, as it is likely that the media will use the stats unattributed to the Congressman. Try to separate those out and let a good solid quote stand alone in that second graph.
* Think about how you might connect this action to the people in the district, either with the quote or with statistics.

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Office of Rep. Henry Waxman
Contact: Nick Chaney

Rep. Waxman Dismayed with Republican Caucus

Washington D.C. - Representative Henry Waxman (D-CA) expressed his concerns about House Republican’s opposition following a hearing held on Wednesday, April 22 to hear testimony on the Income Equality Act.

“What republicans don’t understand is that corporate officers are making millions of dollars per year, yet their companies are receiving large sums in tax deductions for paying them these large amounts.”

Witnesses that testified in front of the committee included Professor Cobb of the Xavier University Economics Department and Jonathan Obee a staff assistant of the House Financial Services Committee. Professor Cobb did not favor the bill and Mr. Obee favored its implementation.

“This is just a continuation of the same old republican partisanship which we have seen the past eight years,” Waxman stated. “It seems they want to continue to cater to big corporations as former President Bush did throughout his two terms with his tax breaks for the same people who led Wall Street, and consequently Main Street, into the deep recession which we are now experiencing.”

Waxman cited many errors in the republicans’ reasoning including the argument that this bill would inhibit businesses from being productive because it took hard earned profits away from the companies. However, Waxman pointed out that the bill would allow companies to reinvest in their employees instead of focusing on the top officers.

“The Income Equality Act will aid in regulating undisciplined companies which need to learn how to reinvest some of the money they pay officers into the company itself,” Waxman explained. “And as Mr. Obee pointed out, often times these CEO’s oversee decreases in revenue, but receive a pay raise because they themselves are on the company board which decides compensation for upper management.”

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* Why talk about Cobb at all? That paragraph doesn't move you forward very much. Shift it to focus on Obee's testimony and articulate the reasons he supported the bill. That provides additional support for your position.
* I think it should just be Republican opposition or Republicans' opposition in the first graph. Shouldn't republican be capitalized later on?
* Wouldn't "tax breaks" convey your point better than "tax deductions?" Language matters. People like deductions. They hate tax breaks. You get it right in the quote, and I think it is clearly more powerful there.
* Last quote is kinda long and clunky. Make it punchy. Drop needless language.. most of the words in that last sentence in the quote are filler. Make it active.

What Should I put in the Portfolio?

Primary Materials (required):
* Congressional Bio piece (make sure it meets the requirements outlined in the syllabus/simulation handout).
* Hearing Statement
* Markup Statement
* Amendment
* (Revised) Constituent Letter (From in-class workshop)
* (Revised) Press Release from workshop
* (Revised) Press Release from simulation

Supplementary Materials
* Original versions of releases/constituent letter
* Notes or questions from hearings and markups
* E-mails to colleagues regarding the simulation
* Dear Colleague letters to colleagues

Ron Paul's press release

For immediate release
Contact: Robert Carroll
carrollr@paul.house.gov

Rep. Ron Paul “dismayed” over Committee Hearing


Washington, D.C. – Rep. Ron Paul (R-Galveston) today expressed concern following the events of the committee hearing to discuss H.R. 1594, the Income Equity Act of 2009.

“My colleagues on the left seem to have failed to realize the disastrous consequences that this bill will have if allowed to pass. This nation is facing significant economic problems, as the economy corrects itself to fix the over valuation of companies that was caused by rampant speculation. Significant government action at this point would only inhibit the economy’s ability to make that correction.”

Rep. Paul was extremely concerned over statements made by Congressional Democrats during the committee hearing. In particular, statements made at the opening of the meeting by Committee Chairman Barney Frank (D-MA).

“Rep. Frank said that so far we have failed to see the ‘trickle-down effects’ of the economy, from rich to poor. However, look around. The signs of it are everywhere, as this economic recession began with the wealthy, who had invested heavily in the stock market, losing a great deal of money. As misery can trickle down, so can wealth. By inhibiting the ability of the wealthy to make money, we are negatively impacting the free market, and are running the risk of removing the investors who help expand business and create jobs from the market.”

Rep. Paul also had plenty to say about Rep. John Boccieri’s (D-OH) question to witness Jonathan Obee, a staffer on the House Financial Services Committee, comparing America’s corporate tax rate with that of other western nations.

“His (Boccieri’s) question was completely off mark. Currently, America has the second highest corporate tax rate out of all industrialized nations when the federal and state corporate taxes are considered together. The United States isn’t very far off from having the highest either, only being behind Japan by .2%. He may have looked only at the federal tax rate when making this statement, but corporations don’t have the luxury of only paying the one tax rate. This bill would only make things worse for American companies, who are struggling with finances and laying off employees, putting them at a further disadvantage against foreign competition.”

This bill will now move on to the amending process in committee, where Rep. Paul has vowed he will do everything within his power to defeat it, or at the very least amend it to a form that “will have less of a negative impact on the American people.”

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* The lede is too vague. The first paragraph should give the reader a very clear indication what the story is about, but this one just doesn't. "Expressing concern" is weak, I think, particularly for Paul who tends to be outspoken. Why is he concerned? That needs to be up front and center.

* Quotes should be punchy to fit into a story.

“My colleagues on the left seem to have failed to realize the disastrous consequences that this bill will have if allowed to pass." is better expressed as: "This bill is a disaster," said Paul. "It's nothing more than a back door tax increase to fund more wasteful government programs."

* I think you are better served by referring to democrats vaguely rather than specifically here. By calling them out specifically, the media will call them for a response, and the story is "Congressman Paul in war of words with Congressman X." That's not a good storyline. Better to keep your opponents in the background, unseen and unheard. Most importantly, don't repeat your opponent's arguments -- you do the work for them and get their message out.

* Devote a paragraph to explaining (in your terms) what the bill does. You do a good job trying to say where it is, but need to be specific about the committee (I understand this is an area that is difficult as the committee is fictional. Call it the House Special Committee on Income Equity and Economic Fairness.) The details of the bill would probably go in the same graph.

* Take a look at Paul's press releases and make sure you are getting his tone right.

Allen Boyd's Dear Colleague Letter

My Fellow Democrat Colleagues,

Over the past few weeks, members of the Democrat Caucus expressed their concerns about my allegiance to the party. Often, my fellow Democrats speculate that my ideological values have aligned itself more with the Republican Party. Let me be clear, I am first and foremost, a proud member of the Democrat Party. For those who doubt this fact, I will like to direct their attention to my voting record during the 110th Congress. Throughout the last two years of President Bush’s administration, I voted with the majority of the Democrats over 93% of the time. I assure you that this Blue Dog will not go astray; I am committed to upholding the values of the Democrat Party.

America faces many great challenges. Homes have been lost, jobs shed, businesses shuttered. Our health care is too costly, our schools fail too many, and each day brings further evidence that the ways we use energy strengthen our adversaries and threaten our planet. We have no time to waste during these trying days. Congress must act intelligently, innovatively, and inclusively in order to put this country back on the right track. Members of the Democrat Party I say to you that we have much work to do, and we cannot do it by ourselves.

In the second congressional district of Florida, Tallahassee and North Florida area, over 125, 000 citizens voted for my Republican opponent. As the congressional officer from North Florida, I am charged to represent individuals that voted for or against me, as well as citizens who did not vote at all. With this in mind, it is my duty to work across the aisle, to entertain competing interest, and to seek multiple viewpoints on every piece of legislation before I cast my vote.

I have attentions to support the Home Equity Act of 2009. However, it will be in the American people’s best interest that we thoroughly debate, discuss, and deliberate over the language of this bill in order to make sure that this measure does a service to our constituents.

Thank you for your time and I look forward to working more with you in order to pass H.R. 1594.

Sincerely,

Allen Boyd
Member of Congress

Mariani's comments:

* Good letter. Not too many changes, really. I have attentions -- do you mean that you intend to support the bill?
* If you aren't positive, you should leave yourself a little wiggle room -- I support the goals of the bill and hope to work to strengthen the bill, or something like that. If you are positive (and worried about your primary constituency) then "intend to support" is fine.
* A shot at Bush and Republicans on the deficit would have strengthened your hand on the left without alienating any crossover voters on the right, for what it is worth.

Hensarling Hearing Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Office of Congressman Jeb Hensarling
Contact: Patrick Miller
555-555-5555
April 23, 2009

Representative Hensarling is happy with the hearing on Income Equity Act

Washington D.C – On Wednesday, April 22, Congress met to have a hearing in regards to the recently proposed bill, H.R. 1594. This bill has been called the Income Equity Act of 2009 and has been under much scrutiny over its feasibility. Rep. Hensarling (R-TX) was very pleased with how the hearing went.

“I think that the hearing last night was a success. We heard some great testimony from Dr. Cobb and the Republicans were able to articulate their position well”, Rep Hensarling is quoted as saying. “It is important that the Republican caucus do what it can to reject this bill. I will do what I can to make that happen and I think last night’s hearing was a positive first step”, said Rep Hensarling early this morning.

Rep. Hensarling has been an outspoken critic of the Income Equity Act of 2009 because of its lowering the amount of deductions allowed to companies. Hensarling hopes that through a bipartisan effort this bill will get rejected. With less tax breaks, companies will have less money for investment in growth opportunities.

Representative Hensarling has claimed that he will vote against this bill but will continue to look for alternatives to trying to get the economy back on track. If there are any questions, comments or concerns, please direct them to the district office.

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Mariani comments:

* First reaction on the headline is "blah..." Are you looking to be alliterative (is that a word?)? How about Henserling Happy that House Holds Hearing. Only kidding, of course. Happy just seems odd word choice. The headline is too vague to really say anything useful to grab the media's attention. Keep in mind that the media likes conflict -- or, at least some sort of action that makes the story worth reporting.
* I think you should rework the release to focus on Hensering's opposition and the fact that the hearings provide further evidence that the bill will hurt the economy, etc... Alternatively, you can take your comments from the hearing and rework those into a release -- Henserling leads fight in committee against Dem tax increase -- or something like that. You can incorporate some of your comments from the hearing into the quotes in that event.

For Immediate Release
Office of Congressman John Boehner
Contact: Jason Chastang
513-777-9876
chastangj@congress.gov
April 22nd, 2009

Congressman Boehner Thanks Professor Cobb for Expertise

Washington D.C. - United States Representative John Boehner (House Minority Leader R-OH) is pleased to formally announce that Professor Steven Cobb from Xavier University in Cincinnati, Ohio will be testifying in front of Congress on Wednesday, April 22nd.

“Professor Cobb is one of the leading Economic minds this country has to offer,” said Congressman Boehner. “His testimony on The Income Equity Act of 2009 is very important during this economic crisis and should be deeply considered by all parties. On behalf of the Republican Party and Congress, I would like to thank Professor Cobb for offering his expert advice on this bill.”

Professor Cobb graduated with a BA (Economics, magna cum laude) from The University of Vermont in 1969. In 1974, Professor Cobb graduated with a PhD (Economics) from Brown University. From 1994 to 2001 Professor Cobb was the Director of Economic Research at Xavier University. He has taught numerous courses at the Undergraduate and Graduate levels since his arrival at Xavier University in 1984. Professor Cobb has also been awarded the Williams College of Business Teacher of the Year Award three times since his arrival.

Congressman Boehner is pleased that Professor Cobb has accepted the invitation to speak in front of Congress and looks forward to his testimony. Congressman Boehner believes that the testimony of Professor Cobb will play an important role in the deliberation of the proposed bill. Congressman Boehner believes Professor Cobb’s testimony will grab the attention of not only Republicans but also conservative Democrats.

Any questions, concerns, or comments can be directed to Congressman Boehner’s office.

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* Just go with House Minority Leader John Boehner (R-OH)
* I like the local angle - Boehner brings Xavier professor to Congress, etc... I think the "thank you" angle to the release needs to go, however. How about "Boehner: Congress should heed XU Professor's testimony on Income Bill" or something like that.
* Quote from second paragraph starts out good, but you need to make it clear that his advice was that this bill will hurt the economy, etc... Don't let the media fill in the blanks. Get that point out in every single quote if you can.

For Immediate Release
April 21, 2009
Contact: Brice Lipman 555-555-5555

Congressman Ryan Presents Alternative Option to The Blue Dog Coalition

Washington D.C- United States Representative Paul Ryan (R-WI) formally acknowledged that he attended a meeting Monday evening with Congressman Boyd (D-FL), Congressman Donnelly (D-IN), and Congressman Shuler (D-NC) concerning H.R. 1594-the Income Equity Act of 2009. Ryan attended the meeting with the intent of conveying alternative options to these members of the Blue Dog Coalition as they continue to contemplate their votes on H.R. 1594.

In reference to the meeting, Congressman Ryan declared, “Throughout my 10 years in Congress I have always made it a priority to work in a bipartisan fashion. My meeting with the Blue Dogs is further evidence of my belief in understanding all sides of an issue.” Ryan’s meeting was the first official bipartisan conference concerning the Income Equity Act of 2009.

Ryan further noted that throughout the meeting he expressed his deep apprehensions regarding the legislation. Ranking Member Ryan articulated his concerns with the intent that the Blue Dog Coalition would recognize that they do not have to follow Democratic leadership concerning the bill. Furthermore, Ryan attended the meeting hoping to negotiate a compromise between the Republican Caucus and the Blue Dogs.

Although the conference was closed to the public, it was alleged that Ryan and the Coalition discussed possible amendments to the legislation. In particular, the language regarding the role of the Treasury Secretary seems to be an important concern among both Ryan and Blue Dogs. Additionally, the legislation’s ability to affect all corporations rather than just those receiving government funds was identified as a major concern for the Blue Dog Coalition.

In regards to the specific negotiations, none of the attending Congressional Members chose to formally comment. Yet, as Congressman Ryan returned to his Longworth House office early Tuesday morning, he remarked, “All options are still on the table.”

The meeting took place in Congressional Member Boyd’s office in the Canon Office Building. Congressional Members Ryan, Shuler, Donnelly, and Boyd were seen entering Boyd’s office at approximately 7:00 P.M. (EST) and exiting just after 8:00 P.M. (EST).

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Interesting developments. I'm very interested in learning more at caucus tomorrow.

The release is nearly perfect. The only concern I have is that you go a bit too far with the faux-journalism style. Since this comes out of your office, it is hard to say "alleged" -- as you know whether the allegations are true or not. Likewise, the detached observer reporting who attended the meeting is also a bit too far since you were at the meeting.

There is some risk in a release like this, which I will comment on further after the simulation is complete. Overall, nice work on this.

Press Release: Rep. Culberson Intent on Vote

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Contact: Bridget E. Callanan

Representative John A. Culberson to vote against H. R. 1594.

In regards to the proposed bill to amend the Internal Revenue Code of 1986 to limit the deductibility of excessive rates of executive compensation, Representative John A. Culberson (R-TX) has stated that he will not vote in favor of the legislation. Culberson stated that “The bill will have a negative effect on the majority of the constituents in my district. Many large corporations are located in my district, and these private companies do not want the federal government to interfere with their compensation for their executive employees. They want to decide for themselves the fair compensation for the duties performed by their employees, regardless of their position in the company.”

Culberson, who spent much time and effort to give the constituents of his district the power to govern themselves, claims there is no way that he would be able to vote in favor of the bill as it is presented at this time. Just as he refutes any new government spending programs, he also advocates against the expansion of the power of the federal government, and fears that this bill would allow for both. In the past, Culberson has voted against most tax legislation, and his position on this bill to limit the excessive compensation of executive employees follows his positions on increasing taxes and increased or new government spending.

Any concerns or suggestions concerning this legislation or any other legislation are welcomed by Rep. Culberson's office.

1. I'm looking for the rest of this release. As there is no clear indication it is finished, I have to wonder whether the rest of it was picked up off the fax machine. I'm really confused and this is going to ruin my entire day as I wait for the rest of the release to come over.
2. You are backing into that first sentence too much. "In regards..." works for a letter, I suppose, but not for a press release. Try: "Rep. John A. Culbertson today announced the he will oppose the Income Equity Act (HR XXX) when it comes up for a vote in committee early next week." Put the congressman in the center of the action and keep your intro simple.
3. Avoid using language that hurts your cause -- tying the bill to executive compensation only makes your position less supportable in the current climate. Describing it as "imposing unprecedented and intrusive government regulations on private sector companies" would be far preferable, given your stance.
4. Short direct paragraphs are better than longer ones. Second paragraph should be a quote.

Alesia's Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
OFFICE OF CONGRESSMAN PATRICK J. TIBERI
Mary Jane Johnson
555-999-9999
johnsonm@congress.gov
April 20th, 2009


Rep. Tiberi Does Not Like the Income Equity Act

Republican congressman Patrick J. Tiberi (OH-12) attended a congressional meeting today to discuss his reaction concerning the Income Equity Act Bill (H.R. 1594). H.R. 1594 reduces tax deductions for executive compensations, and Tiberi was not happy at all.

"With the way our economy is now, the Income Equity Act is not a proper solution to help our economy get back on track. This bill generates too many underlying issues for my constituents back at home and my constituencies in Washington. This bill just doesn't affect the larger companies, but the smaller firms as well. Firms back home will not have the opportunity to recruit the same type of talent that the larger firms can because of a lack in capital," retorted Tiberi briefly after his opening statement.

Keeping jobs seemed to be a huge concern for Tiberi during this congressional meeting. "The decline of jobs have worsened over the past year. In March alone, the number of unemployed persons increased by 694,000 to 13.2 million, while the unemployment rate rose to 8.5 percent. I am just scared that this bill will alleviate many smaller firms because their ability to compete with the bigger firms will not be as strong. As representatives of this country, don't we want to create more jobs, and get this economy headed in the right direction?" asked Tiberi.

Tiberi ends his statement by saying, "I hope the Democrats see exactly what this bill is proposing, and how it could affect many companies. If our concern is to better the economy, then this is not the route that we need to take."

Any questions, concerns, or comments should be directed to Congressman Tiberi's office.

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1. "Act" and "bill" are redundant. Just say Income Equity Act in the first paragraph. These words can be used interchangeably, for the most part.
2. Again, avoid talking about executive compensation, but focus on the removing tax deductions and imposing new government mandates during a recession, which is probably a better angle.
3. Wordy quote, but I do like the focus on the impact on small businesses.
4. Also like the focus on jobs in the final paragraph, but keep the quotes short and to the point. Don't put stats in the quotes, but use the quotes to frame the debate.
5. Why say that jobs "seemed" to be his concern. You know. Again, this is where you can let down your guard a bit and be biased -- you aren't an objective reporter.
"Tiberi made it clear that his number one concern was local jobs, saying "I blah blah blah..."

Rep. John Boccieri (D-Oh) To Vote To Limit Executive Compensation

For Immediate Release
Contact Wesley Sloat: 513-277-9656
20 April 2009

Washington- Congressmen John Boccieri (D-Oh) has announced he will vote yes on a Bill which will limit executive compensation for bank executives who recieved Federal Bailout money to $500,000 a year. Congress is currently debating the bill and is expected to vote on it later this week. A hearing is scheduled for Wednesday evening at which time members of the Committee will be able to question experts on the matter.

"I call on my fellow members of Congress to vote yes on this Bill and help restore trust in the American financial system" Congressman Boccieri said. "The voters in my district worked hard for that tax money which is being used to keep these banks in business, and it is wrong to give their money in million dollar lump sums to the executives who made the bad decisions which lead us into this economic collapse."

Congressman Boccieri represents the State of Ohio and the 16th Dsitrict, both of which have been unproportionally hard hit by the economic collapse. "The voters in my district and my state have worked hard and been suffering from job loss and wage cuts for years. During this time Washington has turned a blind eye to them. I cannot vote to reward the richest businessmen who have made bad business decisions with more taxpayer cash while Blue Collar Americans are left behind."

Congressman Boccieri believes that as long as major banks are recieving public dollars to operate, their must be regulation on how much their executives make similar to other government organizations. "In other government organizations like the Military, the difference between the highest paid official and the lowest paid is about 17-1, in some of these bailed out banks the difference is about 245-1. I think we need to move that number closer to other government organizations while they are getting public money."

Congressmen Boccieri continues to work hard for the workers and families of the 16th district of Ohio, fighting for workers rights and protecting American jobs. If you have any questions about this legislation or other legislation you are encouraged to contact his office at 513-277-9

656.

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1. I like the first paragraph, but my understanding is that this bill applies to all firms, not just bailout firms.
2. Mortal sins -- "received" is not spelled correctly (twice) and "district" (once).
3. I like the quote, though it may have to be revised in light of #1 above.
4. Very interesting statistic on government wages versus private sector wages. Nice work!

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Contact: Francesca Veitch (202) 555-1234
Francesca.Veitch@mail.house.gov

Chairman Barney Frank of the Committee to deliberate upon H.R. 1594 released the following statement today:

“While all Americans are being affected by the current economic conditions, some are struggling more than others. For this reason I am pleased to have the opportunity to work with my esteemed colleagues in a bi-partisan effort to help restore compensation equity to those businesses receiving government funding.

“Our intention in the Democratic caucus is that the workers who have built these companies from the ground up and made sacrifices over the last year to keep them afloat be as fairly compensated for their efforts as the executives who administrate from the top down. These workers have met the difficult times with determination and doubled efforts. The Democratic caucus believes that this dedication deserves appropriate remuneration from their respective employers.

“Currently executive compensation is deductible under section 162 of the Internal Revenue Code of 1986. This bill would limit that deduction for companies included in the Troubled Assets Relief Program (TARP) to either $500,000 or 25 times the lowest compensation for any full-time employee. This piece of legislation will aid the American middle-class at a crucial time and enable funds previously used for excessive executive compensation to instead be used for the betterment of all workers in a company, from the bottom up.”

Hearings for H.R. 1594 begin April 22, 2009.

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1. I like the decision to go with a statement. It doesn't work for everyone, but the chairman can certainly get away with it in this instance.
2. Maybe I am confused about the bill -- I have to double check to see if it applies to all firms or just TARP firms! I need a legislative assistant.
3. The statement itself is very good. I wouldn't change it.

Rep. Mark Kirk's Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Contact Peter J. Fricke

REP. MARK KIRK URGES DEMOCRATS TO OPPOSE H.R. 1594

Republican Congressman Mark Kirk (IL-10) held a press conference with local and national media on Monday in which he called for bipartisan opposition to H.R. 1594, the Income Equality Act of 2009, which reduces tax deductions for executive compensation.

Rep. Kirk outlined several reasons why Democratic lawmakers should be hesitant to support the bill. "My Democratic colleagues have advanced this legislation in the interest of reducing the gap between the lowest- and highest-paid workers in American companies. Unfortunately, the method they chose is not only incapable of delivering the desired results, but will have a negative impact on investment, tax revenues, and America's competitiveness abroad", said Kirk during his opening statement.

Some Democratic representatives have suggested that the bill may be a step toward great fiscal responsibility, but Kirk disagrees, saying, "Imposing any sort of artificial impediment to business, especially one which hurts investment as this bill does, can only delay the economic recovery that the President's budget depends on for solvency".

Congressman Kirk vocally supported efforts to include limitations on executive pay in the Financial Industry Bailout which was passed last Fall, and even suggested that the top executives at the failed companies should be fired. When questioned by reporters about his apparent flip-flop on the issue of executive salary limitations, Kirk explained that, "in September, we were talking about companies which had created their own problems, and which were going to be receiving taxpayer dollars to stay alive. Today, we are talking about a limitation on executive pay across the board, and that amounts to government interference in the labor market, which has never worked".

All opinions, questions, and comments should be directed to Congressman Kirk's Washington, D.C. office.

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1. Nice opening, though I still wonder whether you can be more vague about the executive compensation part. Something about government officials setting private sector wages sounds more ominous, though it is clunky.
2. I wouldn't repeat the Democrats argument in the second paragraph -- it makes the quote too long and repeats the democratic message. Focus on your message instead, which is well articulated.
3. Again, why mention that reporters accused you of flip-flopping -- this repeats the charge. It's the old saying about the guy rebutting charges of spousal abuse. If he is quoted saying, "I don't beat my wife," he's already lost in the court of public opinion -- nobody hears the denial, just the charge. Focus on your points, not responding to the other side. (Note: Though this seems like a harsh example, it's the one that is commonly used to make this point.)

Allen Boyd's Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE PRESS RELEASE
THE OFFICE OF CONGRESSMAN ALLEN BOYD
Joe Smith
555 – 555 – 1234
joe.smith@us.congress.gov
April 25, 2009

BOYD TO LEAD BLUE DOGS INTO BI-PARSIAN ACTION

Washington, DC – Blue Dog Co-Chairman Congressman Allen Boyd (D-FL) announces that his coalition plans to meet with members from both sides of the aisle before voting on Income Equity Act of 2009, H.R. 1594. Throughout negotiations, Boyd will make sure that Blue Dog members will consistently work with parties on all sides to ensure that executive compensation is limited and to ensure that the tax deductibles are significantly reduced for parties receiving tax payer’s money. Overall, Boyd and the rest of the Blue Dogs are looking for a final rescue package that includes a standard of fiscal discipline that would protect Main Street and prevent the country from falling deeper into debt.

“Congress must be fiscal responsible to find a solution to our economic problems. Government overspending is a disease”, said Boyd. “Supplying a stimulus package can only correct the symptoms, but not cure our current financial irresponsibility”.

Conservative Democrats Allen Boyd (D-FL), Heath Shuler (D, NC), and Joe Donnelly (D, IN) have already been in contact with Republican Congressman Paul Ryan (R, WI) and other members of the Republican Party. The Blue Dog coalition has not publically state their intent to support for the Income Equity Act of 2009. Congressman Boyd has called for a Blue Dog meeting in response to the Democratic Caucus summit that took place on Friday, April 17. The Blue Dog Coalition meeting will take place on this Tuesday, April 21.

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1. In first paragraph, "today announced" instead of "announces" would be better.
2. First paragraph is way too long. Keep it like a newspaper paragraph -- short and sweet.
3. The first sentence in the quote can be dropped to focus on the "Government spending is the disease," it's a colorful quote and should get you plenty of coverage. I don't know any reporters who wouldn't make that quote part of the lead. The second part of that quote reads a bit off, take a second run at it.
4. Mortal sin: misspelling publicly.
5. Remember that the blue dogs are still Democrats. Couch your discussions as effort to bridge partisan divide, but also emphasize your interest in working with your other democratic colleagues and leadership to find bipartisan solutions. You don't want to anger the chairman too much (influence in the House is important, you know).

Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Contact: Bridget E. Callanan

Rep. John A. Culberson announced today that the month of March month would be designated to increasing awareness regarding Colorectal Cancer.

Colorectal cancer, the second most common cause of cancer deaths in the United States affects both men and women equally. However, colorectal cancer is preventable, treatable, and in most cases, beatable. Therefore, the majority of these deaths can be prevented through proper screening and early detection. These programs provide for a 90 percent survival rate for colorectal cancer. Nevertheless, colorectal cancer will claim 49, 960 lives this year, as a result of inadequate awareness; only 39 percent of people diagnosed with colorectal cancer are diagnosed at an early stage. Proper screening and early screening could result in an 80 percent decrease in the death rate from this cancer.

Proper screening for colorectal cancer has been ranked as one of the most cost effective screening interventions at this time through the tens of billions dollars saved from the Medicare program for cancer prevention and treatment costs. Proper screening also has the capability to save 40,000 lives a year, an astonishing decrease from the estimated 49, 960 deaths of 2009. Representative Culberson commented “Any new technology developed that enables doctors to save the lives of the ill in our country must be addressed and supported. Educating the public about the availability and importance of proper screening and early detection should be a main goal of the community as it has such potential to decrease the number of deaths associated with colorectal cancer”.

Although the Prevent Cancer Foundation has launched many campaigns and developed many partnerships dedicated to raising awareness regarding the invaluable process of proper screening, we must continue to educate the nation on these life saving strategies.

Any concerns or suggestions concerning this legislation or any other legislation are welcomed by Rep. Culberson's office.

* Is there more to the release? It isn't clear. I didn't see a ### or -30- so I have to assume there is more here somewhere.
* How would they get a hold of you? Put a phone number up top (make one up)!
* Try to write leaner. "would be designated to increasing awareness regarding Colorectal Cancer" could be "is Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month"
* There is a quote in the second paragraph, but it is buried in text. Get it up front -- no more than a sentence of text ahead of it in the second paragraph (better yet, make the quote the focus of that entire paragraph). Keep in mind, getting the quote into the paper (or mentioned in a television or radio story) is often the most important part of the release, from your perspective.

Constituent Letter

Dear Mr. Mann,

Thank you very much for sharing your views on the issue of government bailouts. I appreciate having the benefit of your feedback on this matter.

I understand your concern regarding the government bailouts increasing the national debt. I respect your concern as a voter and as a taxpayer of your earned income being used toward programs from which you do not benefit. It is my duty to ensure that as a taxpayer, your views are addressed and the views of the district are represented adequately in the legislature.

From my experience in the Texas House of Representatives, I have recognized the importance of my constituents having a government that represents their interests. I allowed for this to occur through the restoration of the 10th Amendment and letting Texans run Texas. I continued to ensure this restoration of the 10th Amendment by passing the Prison Litigation Reform Act in 1997. My current positions on the House Appropriations Committee and the panel’s Transportation Subcommittee enable me to represent the views of our district. Finally, my experience on the Republican Steering Committee enhanced my ability to draft committee assignments, a key role in determining whether or not government bailouts and new spending were addressed.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.

Sincerely,

Rep. John A. Culberson
Member of Congress

* Sharing someone's concerns about the debt is better than understanding them.
* Repeating "concern" in two straight sentences is awkward. That second sentence in the 2nd paragraph is awkward and wordy, anyhow ("your earned income being used towards programs from which you do not benefit"???) I'm sure you can express this point more clearly, powerfully, and concisely.
* Third paragraph is similarly wordy. Also, you are throwing in a bunch of info at the constituent in one paragraph -- it's just too much to digest. Good to show your congressman is active and to build credibility, just don't overwhelm the reader in a single paragraph.
* Did your congressman oppose the bailout/stimulus? Virtually all Republicans opposed the second one, so why not bring that opposition up? You are missing an opportunity here, I think.

Press Release (Peter Fricke)

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE

Contact Peter J. Fricke

Rep. Mark Kirk Agrees to Designate March "Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month"

Rep. Mark Kirk of Illinois' 10th Congressional district announced today that, with his support, Congress today passed a resolution making March the national colorectal cancer awareness month.

"Given the record of success we have had in promoting awareness of other important issues by creating a national month for them, as well as the need for colorectal cancers to be combated with the same resolve currently applied toward more prominent cancers like breast and prostate cancer, I felt that this resolution was a major step forward in the nation's continuing struggle to prevent and treat this deadly disease", said Rep. Kirk in an interview with the AARP on April 12th.

The bill, which was easily passed without amendment, is intended to reduce the mortality rate from such cancers by encouraging people to be tested earlier in life and more frequently, thereby allowing those afflicted with colorectal cancer to be diagnosed earlier, when the disease is more treatable.

Kirk, a Republican Congressman from President Obama's home state of Illinois, has long been a supporter of efforts to reduce the incidence and severity of cancer, the most deadly disease in the country. Kirk concluded his interview by suggesting that, "any effort to curb the ill-effects of any disease, especially one as deadly as cancer, is one we should make, and I think this legislation is a major step in that direction".

Any questions, concerns, or comments regarding this legislation may be directed to Congressman Kirk's office.

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* Shorten headline to "Kirk supports bill declaring March Colorectal Awareness Month"
* The fact that there was no vote complicates the introduction, obviously.
* That second paragraph quote is way, way too long and wordy. Get it down to the basics so it can fit in a short blurb in the paper. The last line in that quote can probably stand on its' own.
* Why give a shout out to Obama in your release? Aren't you a Republican?
* Don't mention the "interview" -- it never happened and there is only so much fakery that we can stomach in these things. You want to write it like a news story, but you can't pretend it is a news story and citing an interview is a step too far, I think.

Nick Chaney's Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
Contact Nick J. Chaney

Waxman Announces March as Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month
March to be used for education on early detection and screening

U.S. Representative Henry A. Waxman, D-Los Angeles, announced the renewal of March as Colorectal Cancer Awareness month. March will be set aside for education and awareness of the cancer.

“It is extremely important to make the public aware of the dangers of Colorectal Cancer,” Representative Waxman said. “Every 3.5 minutes someone is diagnosed with colorectal cancer and every ten minutes someone is killed by the disease.”

The announcement comes as the House of Representatives recently passed the resolution to continue recognizing March as awareness month for the disease. The House passed the resolution on a voice vote.

“Colorectal cancer, if detected too late the patient has a ten percent survivability rate,” Waxman explained. “If detected early enough he/she has a ninety percent survival rate.”

Every March will be a special opportunity to promote education on the importance of early screening. The month will also be used to commend those community and health organizations which aid in educating the public on colorectal cancer


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* I thin you can strengthen the consequences a bit in the first graph: "Waxman pointed out that the bill will encourage federal health officials to raise public awareness about the dangers of this potentially fatal cancer." or some such thing.

* Careful using statistics in quotes. The media will pull the stat and use it, but that leaves you without a key quote to put in front of them. The stat is great, though, and helps build your credibility. Keep it in, but let the quotes stand on their own without them.

* Great explanation of what happened to the bill. Short and to the point. I would not be vague about the statement (The Statement, should be "Waxman's statement").

* Missed a period at the end.

Patrick Miller Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
April 11, 2009
Contact Rep. Jeb Hensarling 123-456-7890

Representative Hensarling: March is now Colorectal Awareness Month

Representative Jeb Hensarling (R-TX) took the time today to announce to the 5th district of Texas that Congress has now passed a bill to make March the official month for Colorectal Awareness.

“I am proud to announce that Congress has shown that it understands some of the health problems that people can have and is trying to make an effort to make more people aware of those problems.” said Rep. Hensarling during a press conference in Athens, Texas across the street from his district office.

The bill passed on a voice vote after being quickly run through Congress with no amendments. This bill was passed with the hope that awareness for colon cancer will increase and early detection will help reduce the mortality rates of that cancer. The earlier it is detected the better the chance of curing it. Rep. Hensarling is pleased that positive steps towards colon cancer awareness.

“I look forward to the effects of this fine piece of legislation” Rep Hensarling proclaimed as he wrapped up his impromptu press conference. He concluded by inviting anyone to write to his office if they have any concerns or suggestions concerning this legislation or any other legislation.

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* Great headline. To the point and suggests action.
* Write leaner. First paragraph is cluttered. "...took the time today to announce to the 5th district of Texas..." could be replaced with "announced." Also, get rid of passive "has now passed a bill to make March the official month" and replace with "passed legislation making march Colorectal Cancer Awareness month."
* Why give the credit to Congress. Focus on your district! Keep it local. Focus on your action, not Congress and bring everything back to the district!!!!
* I do like that he made the comments in front of his district office -- but his comments seem disconnected from his constituents.
* Quote in final paragraph is vague.

Donnelly Press Release

FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE
CONTACT: Andy Bilyk
April 9, 2009
260-514-2459

Donnelly Supports Colorectal Awareness Month

Congressman Joe Donnelly (IN-2) announced today that he supports a bill to continue Colorectal Awareness Month and to promote prevention and early detection of colorectal cancer.

“As colorectal cancer is the second leading type of cancer death and equally affects both men and women, we must bring more awareness to this highly lethal cancer and decrease its death toll,” said Congressman Donnelly.

This bill marks the 10th anniversary of March as Colorectal Awareness Month. However it goes beyond that and focuses on three parts which are to observe Colorectal Awareness Month, recognize organizations that promote awareness and fight the cancer, and urge other organizations to increase awareness and provide health services such as early identification screenings and removal of pre-cancerous polyps.

Donnelly also said, “When it is that every ten minutes someone dies from colorectal cancer, we must do more to fight it, and this bill is a step in the right direction to do that.”

The bill has since moved to the Senate Committee on Health, Education, Labor, and Pensions and is awaiting further action.

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* Nice job with headline and lead. Everything I needed to know in two or three sentences. Only thing missing is that the bill actually passed. That should be up front: "Congressman Joe Donnelly voiced his support for a bill that renews the congressional designation of March as Colorectal Cancer Awareness month. The bill, which passed Congress by a voice vote earlier today, promotes prevention and detection..."
* Rethink the quotes. I'm wary of using the stats in the quotes themselves (in the release is a different story). Also, the quotes don't read punchy enough. Not sure I would use them in a story. Something positive, upbeat and bland (non-controversial) is usually what congressmen look for on an issue like this. "We can win the battle against colorectal cancer if the public is armed with the facts," or something like that only better.

Wesley Sloat Constituant Letter

Dear Mr. Ocho Cinco,

Thank you for your letter concerning the AIG Bonuses. I apreciate having your input on this importnt matter.

I am in 100% agreement with you that the bonuses are outragous. I can assure you that I was and still am just as upset as you appear to be over these payouts. The voters in my district like yourself are hard working Americans who put their faith in the American financial system and were severly hurt by the careless actions of the exectutives we now speak of. The voters in my district should not have to pay the golden parachutes of executives who made the bad decisions which led their companies and the nation down this economic mess.

I assure you I am working in congress to make sure all federal money alloted in the bailout will be used for worthy purposes and not simply given to executives. I would like to call your attention to a bill I am supporting. H.R. 1594 will require AIG executives to pay back most of their bonus and cap exectutive pay for companies recieving federal bailout money at $500,000 a year. I have attached a copy of the bill for you to read.

I thank you for writing me and expressing your opinion on this important matter. As your congressman, it is my goal to fight for you and all others in Ohio's 16th district in Washington. If I may be of any service in the future, or if you feel you need to express your opinion on any issue, please do not hesitate to contact my office.

Sincerly,

John Boccieri

* As your chief of staff, I just threw this letter back in your face. I probably swore a bit at you, too. Nine misspelled words! Try again and I will look at it again.

Thank you very much for sharing your views on the AIG bonuses. I appreciate having the benefit of your views on this matter.

Since being elected in November of this year, I have worked diligently to defend the taxpayers of North Carolina’s 11th District. It has long been my goal to ensure that your taxpayer dollars are used in the most effective manner possible. AIG and its executives have been the beneficiaries of $170 billion through the Troubled Asset Relief Program and thus have a responsibility to the people of this great nation.

The action committed by the AIG executives embodies much of what is wrong on Wall Street. As a member of the Blue Dog Coalition I have fought hard to protect Main Street from this frivolous spending.

In order to combat these excessive and appalling bonus payouts, I have voted for a new 90 percent income tax on bonuses paid out by recipients of TARP. The bill, H.R. 1586, passed with an overwhelming bipartisan majority. This effort to protect the citizens of North Carolina and their taxpayer dollars is consistent with my record as a legislator. Additionally I will continue to fight for your fiscal rights in order to promote a healthy and stable economy.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.
Sincerely, Joseph Shuler
Member of Congress

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* November of this year is still a few months away. Did you invent a time machine? If so, you have my vote!
* "It has long been my goal..." suggests that this is about YOU. Make it about the constituent. "I share your view that taxpayer dollars should be used more effectively..." is much more effective.
* the people of this great nation is wordy way to end that sentence. I'd go with, "thus have a duty to use that funding prudently and responsibly." Probably redundant, but sounds ok.
* I like the main street v. wall street line. You should think about something more specific than "the action committed by AIG executives." The decision by AIG executives to award bonuses... is more specific.
* Nice job citing the specific bill that you approved to deal with this problem. That makes you active and responsive. Overall, a good letter.

Committee Membership

Here is the committee list:

Note: You can click on the names to go to the member web sites.

Democrats
Rep. Barney Frank (Francesca Veitch), Chair, D-MA
Rep. Allen Boyd (Allen Boyd), Vice-Chair, D-FL
Rep. Henry Waxman (Nick Chaney), D-CA
Rep. John Boccieri (Wesley Sloat), D-OH
Rep. Luis Gutierrez(Graciela Diaz), D-IL
Rep. Bobby Rush (Adrian Gonzalez), D-IL
Rep. Ed Perlmutter (Lizzy Kuka), D-CO
Rep. Jesse Jackson Jr. (Carolyn Neville), D-IL
Rep. Carolyn Kilpatrick (Aviana), D-MI-13
Rep. Heath Shuler (Dominic Donovan), (D-NC)
Rep. Tim Ryan (Billy Caldwell), D-OH
Rep. Keith Ellison (Martha Cutter-Wilson), D-MN
Rep. Joe Donnelly (Andy Bilyk), D-IN
Rep. Dennis Kucinich (Ellen Beltramo), D-OH

Republicans
Rep. Paul Ryan (Brice), Ranking Member, R-WI
Rep. John Boehner (Jason), R-OH
Rep. Mark Kirk (Peter Fricke), R-IL
Rep. Mark Souder (Ben Schuerman), R-IN
Rep. Mike Pence (Teddy Siegel), R-IN
Rep. Geoff Davis (Brian Elmore), R-KY
Rep. Ron Paul (Bobby Carroll), R-TX
Rep. Jeb Hensarling (Patrick Miller), R-TX
Rep. Patrick Tiberi (Alecia), R-OH
Rep. ? (Bridget)

I'm missing Alecia's Member (she stepped out of the classroom) and Bridget Callanan's and possibly one more. Please let me know!

Wes Sloat Press Release

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April 7, 2009
Contact: Wesley T Sloat (513-277-9656)


Congressman Boccieri: Proud To Support Colorectal Cancer Awareness

Washington: Congressman John Boccieri (D Canton) today announced his support for the continuation of a House Bill designating March as the official Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month.

Colorectal Cancer is a serious heath risk facing all Americans, male or female. Nearly 150,000 cases will be discovered annually causing over 40,000 deaths. If the cancer is caught early it can be stopped. 90% of early detection cases are survived. However if it is not caught early and spreads to other organs, the survivability rate drops to 10%. Annually Americans spend $8.4 billion on this type of cancer alone.

Congressman Boccieri said “I am pleased to support this important legislation raising awareness about a serious health risk facing all Americans. Colorectal Cancer is a major health threat to the American public and to my constituents; however we can save lives by knowing more about it and getting screened early. I also applaud the highly skilled members of the medical community who have worked tirelessly to combat this type of cancer and again pledge my support of federal funds for more cancer research to help save lives.”

Congressman Boccieri represents Ohio’s 16th district which has been disproportionately affected in a negative manner during the recent economic crisis and has lost thousands of manufacturing jobs leaving many workers without healthcare. Congressman Boccieri said “In addition to supporting cancer awareness and research, I will continue to fight for the worker in my district so they have heath care in order for them to receive treatment. Too many of my districts voters are suffering because they do not have healthcare resulting in them not being diagnosed early enough with cancer and other similar conditions putting them at a serious health risk.”

Following the passage of the Bill, it will now head to the Senate for final approval.

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* Pride is a sin when directed at yourself, isn't it? Be active, but not proud of your actions. Supports is sufficient, or fights for,
* Some indication that the House acted already should be in the first paragraph.
* Bring a quote up front to second paragraph.
* After first reference as Congressman Boccieri, you can call him just "Boccieri"
* Quote itself is pretty good, but you go on way too long. Keep it punchy. Focus it on most important parts of the statement.
* It's a joint resolution, not a bill.

Web Readings for Simulation

You'll need these readings for the coming weeks:

Judy Schneider, House Committee Markups: Commonly Used Motions and Requests, April 19, 1999

House Committee on Rules: "A Step By Step Guide to Committee Markups"

House Committee on Rules: "Principles and Prohibitions of Committee Markups"

House Committee on Rules: "House Rules which Govern the Committee Hearing Process"

Richard Sachs, "Hearings in the House of Representatives: A Guide For Preparation and Procedure", July 28, 2004

constituent letter

Dear Mr. Mann,

Thank you very much for sharing your views on future government bailouts. I appreciate having the benefit of your feedback on this matter.

As you may know, I have been one of the strongest critics in Congress concerning these bailouts. On October 3, I gave a speech before the House of Representatives concerning HR 1424, also known as the bailout bill. In this speech, I outlined the futility of such an economic strategy. This move by the federal government only removes the demand for personal responsibility and accountability that has made our nation great. A signed copy of this speech is enclosed for your review.

I look forward to continuing to fight future bailouts on behalf of yourself and the rest of the Texas 14th Congressional District.

If I can be of any further assistance, please do not hesitate to contact my office.

Sincerely,



Rep. Ron Paul
Texas 14th District

1. There are some small things, but nothing of consequence. I can imagine that Paul would add another paragraph talking about the consequences of the bailout to the deficit and estimates on how this would impact taxpayers. At the same time, there are some members who have a much more concise style similar to the one used here -- if only because they want to focus their resources on things other than letters.
2. Signing the speech is a nice touch, though perhaps a bit over the top.

Constituent Letter

Dear Mr. Ocho-Cinco,



Thank you very much for sharing your views on the A.I.G. bonuses. I appreciate having the benefit of your opinions on this matter.

I unconditionally agree with your outrage concerning the executive bonuses at A.I.G. We cannot borrow and spend or bail our way back to a prosperous economy. The hardworking taxpayers are not to blame for the problems that are facing our nation’s economy, and they should not be made to pay the brunt of the consequences. Rewarding the irresponsible behavior of companies such as A.I.G. with the tax dollars of hardworking Americans is not the solution to our nation’s economic crisis, and I am doing everything in my power to see that this irresponsible spending ceases.

My time in congress has allowed me to meet with the hardworking men and women of my district, like you, who are fed up with the bailouts and wasteful spending of their hard-earned money. My time in congress also allows me to fight back against this wasteful spending of taxpayer dollars. In an effort to recoup some or all of the taxpayer money spent on A.I.G. bonuses, I have cosponsored House Resolution 1577, or the A.I.G. Bonus Payment Bill. This bill would attempt to halt the payment of any future A.I.G. bonuses and require the approval from the Treasury for any further bonuses for A.I.G. employees.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.


Sincerely, 



Mike Pence

MEMBER OF CONGRESS

Professor Mariani:
1. You certainly have the tone right, at least from a Republican perspective.
2. Some additional editing will help streamline this just a bit. "I share your outrage" is better than "I unconditionally agree with your outrage..." Likewise, "borrow and spend and bail out" could be edited down. "Some or all" can be dropped. "Attempt to" can also be dropped.
3. Do you pay the brunt of something?
4. The first two sentences in the third graph can probably be dropped so that you can focus the constituent's attention on your actions. If you want to reiterate at the end of the letter, or even at the end of a paragraph, that is better than cluttering up the front end and obscuring the key point which should be right up front. It does seem like you end somewhat abruptly after talking about what you have cosponsored. This seems like the place to make vague assurances that you will continue working on this measure, etc...
5. Small point, but is 1577 a bill or a resolution? A bill/law would be HR. A resolution would be H. Res. and would be binding only on the actions of the House (or symbolic).

constituent letter

Mr. Ocho Cinco,

Thank you very much for sharing your views on the AIG bonuses. I appreciate having the benefit of your views on this matter. Although I did vote for the bailout, as it was necessary to keeping jobs and helping families in the district and to prevent a larger potential crisis from occurring, I share your opinion and am as outraged as you are in the opposition to the AIG bonuses.

You are one of a number of constituents who have written me and shown concern about the AIG bonuses. I am listening to you and taking action. As a member of the House Committee on Financial Services and the Subcommittee on Capital Markets, Insurance, and Government Sponsored Enterprises I have been in committee hearings with other congressmen, others in the government, and members of AIG. I am confident in and plan on getting all of the AIG bonuses back. I recently voted on a bill in favor of putting a 90% and in some instances even 100% tax on the bonuses and the bill has passed the House. This bill has already caused some executives to return their bonuses. I will continue to work to fix this problem and help those who really need financial assistance, whom are everyday people who work hard, not the executives of large banks and insurance companies who participated in poor business practices.

I value constituents’ concerns, such as yours, and I want to thank you again for contacting my office. I appreciate hearing your views on the AIG bonuses. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.

Sincerely,
Congressman Joe Donnelly
2nd District Indiana

Professor Mariani:

1. Why put your disagreement on the bailout ahead of your agreement on the bonuses?
2. First two lines of second paragraph can probably be dropped... "You are one of a number of constituents who have written me and shown concern about the AIG bonuses. I am listening to you and taking action." It sounds like you are blowing smoke. Rather, the next part where you talk about participating in hearings is showing them your agreement. As a general rule: it is better to show than tell. Show you agree with actions rather than saying you agree with words.
3. "I am confident in and plan on getting all of the AIG bonuses back." - don't make promises you can't keep and have little control over.
4. "I recently voted on a bill" - which bill? how recently? Be more specific with legislative details to give yourself credibility.

Constituent Letter

Mr. Ocho-Cinco,

Thank you for contacting my office in regard to the issue of AIG bonuses. Communication between Members of Congress and their constituents is vital, and I appreciate the opportunity to address your concerns.

During deliberation of the Emergency Economic Stabilization Act of 2008 (H.R. 1424), I proposed an amendment which would have prohibited taxpayer dollars from being used to fund executive compensation or golden parachutes. While the amendment was voted on and adopted by Congress, the provision was subsequently overturned by language in the Dodd Amendment to the American Recovery and Reinvestment Act of 2009 (H.R. 1). The amendment, which was authored by Sen. Dodd of Connecticut at the behest of President Obama, allowed recipients of bailout money to grant bonuses which had been under contract prior to the passage of the bailout bill. I have opposed the use of taxpayer dollars for executive compensation from the start, and will continue to pursue any viable options to ameliorate this outrage.

Thank you again for contacting my office, and please do not hesitate to make me aware of issues of concern to you in the future.

Cordially,
Rep. Mark Stephen Kirk
Member of Congress

Professor Mariani:
1. That second paragraph is way too long. Break it up, or simplify it to get it leaner.
2. Nice research on the amendment. You can make it leaner by dropping "voted on and adopted" in favor of "adopted."
3. You face a difficult challenge with explaining a complex legislative action. Unless you are in CT, most people don't know who Dodd is, so it may be better to say something more vague like, "the Democratic leadership in the Senate stripped this important provision from the final bill." That's potentially problematic, because it sounds partisan.
4. You can go the Lieberman route - rather than casting blame (which makes you seem angry and partisan), you can say "I was very disappointed that the Democratic leadership in the Senate stripped this important provision from the bill. And follow up with you continuing to work with responsible members of both parties to achieve the reform or something like that. Again, it will depend on who is sending the letter.
5. Ameliorating the outrage?

Brice Lipman Press Release

For Immediate Release
April 5, 2009
Contact: Brice Lipman 555-555-555

Congressman Ryan Recognizes the Dangers of Colorectal Cancer:
Resolution Passes to continue recognition of March as Colon Cancer Awareness Month


Washington D.C- U.S Representative Paul Ryan (R-Janesville) announced today that the House of Representatives passed a resolution to continue the designation of March as Colorectal Awareness Month.

Congressman Ryan praised the resolution and noted that he has, “worked hard to pass legislation that ensures our health care system remains both affordable and state-of-the-art so that diseases such as colon cancer can be detected early.” The Congressman’s diligence is greatly needed as the resolution noted that, in just 2009, 148,810 people will be diagnosed with colon cancer and, of those, 49,960 will die from colon cancer.

The importance of early detection was further emphasized as Congressman Ryan remarked that, currently, only 39% of colon cancer patients have their cancer detected in the early stages. Consequently, the disease has an unnecessarily high mortality rate. The resolution was passed with the hope that the month of March will continue to be filled with educational events that inform the public of the value in screening and early detection.

The resolution also moved to recognize the many grassroots organizations that work to raise awareness concerning the disease. Among the recognized groups were the Colon Cancer Alliance and the National Colon Cancer Roundtables. Congressman Ryan declared that, “these organizations are models of what can be accomplished when constituents set aside their time to help alert the American public of the critical need for increased screening and early detection.”

Following its passage, the bill was referred to the Senate Committee on Health, Education, Labor and Pensions.
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Professor Mariani:
1. Overall, nicely done.
2. Second graph quote is a bit clunky. Wouldn't that be hard to work into a story if you were a journalist?
3. "the congressman's diligence" is a bit over the top. Good to take credit and be active, but it's not like commemorative legislation is going to cure cancer.
4. "The importance of early detection was further emphasized as Congressman Ryan remarked" can be changed to "Congressman Ryan noted" without losing anything. In general, if you can say something in fewer words, do it.

Alesia's Constituent Letter

Dear Mr. Ocho Cinco,

Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts on the issue concerning the AIG bonuses. I appreciate having the benefit of your feedback on the matter.

I recognize your indignation and frustration regarding this unthoughtful act made by the executives at AIG, when our country is in such an unstable condition financially. In mid March, I expressed my hostility and disappointment on this unbelievable matter. I absolutely agree that there should not have been bonuses given to the people at AIG, the same individuals who were the creators of AIG's declension; this should not stem from the taxpayers' pocket.

As your congressman, I am doing everything in my power to ensure that American taxpayers receive this bonus money back in their wallets. You would be pleased to know that I am a cosponsor of a measure to force Treasury Secretary Timothy Guthner to make public all the documents, records, and communications regarding AIG so we can get to the bottom of this situation, and make sure that this problem is solved so that it will not occur again. I will continue to fight hard concerning this matter, so you and all other taxpayers will not endure the faults of irresponsible and selfish companies like AIG. We funded AIG money to keep them solvent, to better you and the rest of America; not for the executives to misuse and abuse the stipend. And as your representative, I will make sure this is exactly what happens.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.

Sincerely,

Representative Patrick J. Tiberi

Professor Mariani comments:

1. Go with simple words rather than complex ones (indignation). Avoid needless padding (indignation and frustration could be just "frustration").
2. Where did you express your hostility in mid-march? On the house floor? I think you should be specific rather than vague (action, remember).
3. Third paragraph, I like the cosponsorship angle... but would drop the first sentence entirely and keep the focus on the action -- "You will be pleased to know that I am a cosponsor of..." Good research on that one - though you may want to add the specific HR number, as it adds credibility.
4. Declension?
5. It's ok to ensure that this money is returned to the taxpayers...but there is a lot of pockets and wallets going on here. If you say "pockets" - you suggest that the AIG money will go back to individual taxpayers. That's probably not the case. You can use generic "taxpayers" as a synonym for the government (since it is their money) but when you say it goes back to their pockets, that's different than going to the Treasury.
6. Simplify that second last paragraph. Either break it up or slim it down to most important points and edit out needless sentences, words, etc...

Henry Waxman's Constituent Letter

Dear Mr. Ocho-Cinco,

Thank you very much for contacting me to share your opposition to the AIG bonuses. I appreciate having the benefit of your views on this matter.

I am sure you know that recently Congress passed an economic recovery bill which will soon be reviving our economy and aiding is strengthening our country and the state of California. I am an avid supporter of this bill and am working to improve the way in which it helps our economy start growing again. You will be pleased to know that as chairman of the House Oversight and Government reform I held multiple hearings to investigate the irresponsible practices of Wall Street and in the way that the President and his administration handled the economic downturn.

I understand your frustration with the executive’s greediness. I, too, am appalled at the era of excessive living that they have been living in. As your representative I supported the bill to tax bonuses for executives of companies who get bailouts from the taxpayers. Wall Street needs to end its irresponsible ways and I will continue to fight on your behalf to see that executives remember from whom they received these bailouts.

Thanks again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.


Sincerely,

Henry Waxman

Professor Mariani's Comments:

1. This was another one where I had to wade through HTML code in the edit mode. Not sure how you put this together, but the less HTML stuff the better. I cut and pasted from the front page and replaced all the code, otherwise it would have been impossible to get through.

2. Don't pass up an opportunity to demonstrate your command of basic legislative information (On March X, the House of Representatives passed HR XXXX, legislation which restricts...). I'd be shocked if Waxman did not support this bill. Also, shouldn't this be the very first thing you tell the constituent? You bury it in the third paragraph. I think you should put this up front -- Hey, you'll be pleased to know I voted for a bill that punishes those greedy AIG execs! -- That should be front and center. Also, I think "bailout" is not the preferred term for the Democrats -- they have been using "recovery" bill, because it polls better.

3. Excellent job bringing up his position on oversight... I'd save that for the end and put more emphasis on the future than the past (I'll use my authority as chairman to hold executives to account...). If you focus on the past, you may raise questions about how this happened on Waxman's "watch." By focusing on the future, you give the constituent assurances you will be looking out for their interests and keeping this issue on the front burner.

4. As a general rule, try to write "leaner." Shorter sentences, shorter paragraphs are preferable to longer ones. Small changes throughout will help (As I am sure you know becomes "as you know,"). Edit edit edit!

Congressional Letter (Elmore)

Dear Mr. Mann,

Thank you very much for sharing your views on the bailout. I appreciate having the benefit of your views on this matter.

Speaker Nancy Pelosi and Senate Majority Leader Harry Reid are taking Congress on a spending spree and the taxpayers are footing the bill. The trillion dollar stimulus package (H.R. 1) and the omnibus spending bill costing 410 billion dollars (H.R 1105) will cost every single American over ten-thousand dollars in new debt to be paid by our children and grandchildren. This also translates to Congress spending one billion dollars every hour for the last two months. In addition, recent cost-analysis from the non-partisan Congressional Budget Analysis predicts that Pelosi’s spending will result in a 1.9 trillion dollar tax increase.

With Pelosi’s budget, Congress could afford to give every single American a check for $13,000. A Kentuckian could use that money to pay for two years tuition at Northern Kentucky University, six years worth of groceries, or over 6,000 gallons of unleaded gasoline.

This type of spending is certainly dangerous. At this rate, we will incur more debt than America has accumulated in its entire history. It is time for Congress to make the same hard budget decisions that Kentuckians must make every day.

I am committed to fighting against frivolous spending, and to encourage pro-growth policies that reward the entrepreneurship that made America great.

Thank you again for contacting my office. Please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any assistance.

Sincerely,
Representative Geoff Davis

Professor Mariani Comments:

1. I like the effort to build credibility in second paragraph. Good research.
2. Unless you are certain that the writer is a Republican, you should probably avoid the overly partisan shot at Pelosi. That line would alienate democrats AND independents. You can say the same thing in a more measured way (perhaps by attacking Congress more generally, or congressional leadership, or alluding to the fact that you think they are going in the wrong direction -- virtually everyone agrees with those sort of vague criticisms of Congress.
3. Nice touch with the "non-partisan Congressional Budget Office" -- it makes it seem more credible.
4. Small point, but rather than saying "410 billion dollars" -- you can just say $410 billion. It's more concise.
5. "With Pelosi's budget..." is both too partisan and too vague. Are you talking about their stimulus as part of the budget? Are you talking about government spending overall? The idea of translating the spending into something people can relate to is brilliant though!

Graciela Diaz Constituent Letter

Dear Mr. Mann

Thank you very much for sharing your views on the government bailouts. I appreciate having the benefit of your opinion on this matter.

From the extent of these financial problems, I have been faced with the difficult decision of voting for a financial rescue plan. There is no doubt that our economy is in crisis. We see it everyday in the credit problems that prevents the average American from obtaining loans and may prevent our children from obtaining student loans tomorrow. These changes impact the lives of average Americans and that is simply unacceptable. We must take immediate steps to reverse this course, even if it is very unpopular.

I am as frustrated as you are that our government must clean up the mess caused by excess of Wall Street. However, I have chosen to support the legislation because I refuse to stand idly by as the actions of Wall Street ruin the opportunities for our families. But I have demanded that any plan taken up by Congress contain strict oversight, and this bill does. The bill is focus on rebuilding our economy by creating new jobs. This financial rescue plan will also allow for tax relief for small businesses and even families, and will invest in the nation's infrastructure. It is only for the interests of my constituents that I have voted for this bill.

Although I am not happy to cast this vote, I know that it is necessary. I came to Congress to protect the interest and values of my constituents. I know that my vote was a step in the right direction.

Thanks again for contacting my office. If you have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact my office if I can be of any further assistance.

Sincerely,

Luis V. Gutierrez
Member of Congress

Professor Mariani's Comments:
1. "From the extent of these financial problems..." is awkward and I think that paragraph needs some work. I think you are right to connect it to real people (students, credit problems, average americans) but the paragraph needs rewriting and perhaps, chopping down to keep it more concise.
2. You can say "I am as frustated as you are..." in fewer words ("I share your frustration").
3. When you disagree with a constituent, I think you do yourself some good by providing them some reason to believe you have the facts at your disposal that they may lack (you are acting as a trustee). By providing the constituent with some of those facts, you help put your decision into proper perspective and give yourself credibility as an informed member of Congress. You have the spirit (protecting the interests and values of constituents) but no facts here that make me believe that you made a good decision. Keep in mind that someone who disagrees with you will not accept your statements as fact, you will have to give them something more.

Souder Press Release

April 3, 2009
For Immediate Release

Contact:
Ben Schuerman
(260) 424-3041
E. Ross Adair Federal Building, Room 3105
1300 South Harrison Street
Fort Wayne, IN 46802

Souder Supports Cancer Awareness Resolution

On March 30, 2009 the House of Representatives passed a bill supporting colorectal awareness with an overwhelming majority. Congressman Mark Souder (IN-3) voted in support of the bill that celebrated the tenth anniversary of March’s designation as colorectal awareness month. After passage of the bill Souder said, “As the second most common form of cancer death, colorectal cancer is something that must have more awareness in the public’s consciousness.”

Congressman Souder wholeheartedly supports the bill, citing it as a way of emphasizing the seriousness of such a problem and of highlighting the efforts that have already been undertaken to help fight the deadly disease. These efforts include the designation of March as Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month and the formation of various foundations and movements to increase awareness and education about how to prevent colorectal cancer, among many other things.

Congressman Souder’s only lament about the bill was its lack of action. “I merely wish that we could pass more legislation to directly help the screening and awareness process itself, instead of merely commending those efforts already taken place.” The resolution the House passed supports the observance of Colorectal Cancer Awareness Month in order to provide more opportunities for education, recognizes organizations for their efforts in promoting awareness, and urges other groups and health practitioners to promote awareness and screening.

The bill was received by the Senate on March 31, 2009 where the Senate Committee on Health, Education, Labor, and Pensions has yet to act on it.

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Professor Mariani Comments:
1. The address will typically be on the press release letterhead somewhere, so don't need to sweat that.
2. Good headline.
3. I didn't realize that the bill was to recognize the 10th anniversary of the declaration. I'm learning something important, that's good.
4. You can get creative and put a quote in the first paragraph, but I would always emphasize (almost exclusively) a quote in the second paragraph. The reporters will look to the second paragraph for the quote and it is good to give them your best quote in that space.
5. On that first quote, try to make it more concise and punchy. Say more with less. "Colorectal cancer is a killer." Is better than "Colorectal cancer takes the lives of 45,000..." Those sort of details are great to include and will often be used in the article, but you really run the danger that the reporter uses the figure and doesn't attribute it to the congressmember.
6. There are a lot of extra words here that can be dropped (merely, wholeheartedly, etc...).
7. Likewise, you should make your sentences more concise. "...citing it as a way of emphasizing the seriousness of such a problem and of highlighting the efforts that have already been undertaken to help fight the deadly disease" is way more complicated than it needs to be. Likewise "citing it as a way of emphasizing the seriousness of such a problem and of highlighting the efforts that have already been undertaken to help fight the deadly disease" is also overly long.
8. Would Souder want the government to do more? Possibly. If so, he may have already voted in the past to increase funding for screening for low income Americans or some such thing. That sort of vote would be helpful (and would likely be somewhere in a press release).